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The Street
Author: Everybody_Else
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(Added on Nov 13, 2010)
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My very first self bondage experience. It sort of went wrong, but it turned out to be a good thing after all. |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Nov 27, 2010 |
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Apart from the title having little to do with the tale, I don't see anything wrong with the mental faculties of the husband.
I have more 'problems' with some of the stuff that is going on in the story, just because things are far from clear.
Okay, so the woman is blindfolded and thus it's quite normal she can't describe in great detail what happens. But I do hope that the author had her eyes unpeeled, so, she could/should have provided a tad more clarity.
This being said, I'm off to have a go at Everybody Else's other stories. No, not everybody else's, just Everybody Else's... just to make *that* clear.
JJ (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Everybody_Else
(Edit) (Nov 27, 2010)
- Apart from the title having everything to do with the self bondage taking part in our flat on the ground floor and people on the street outside being able to see in, you're right. Little to do with the tale :)
Since I was describing a self bondage event where a blindfold was paramount, I decided not to describe anything I could not percieve with the senses left.
But thank you for your contructive critischism.
- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Nov 28, 2010)
- Hey, since you were inside and not on the street, the story could have been called "The Flat" then, heh?
There's a tramway outside my door. In the summer, when my window is open --and there's folks on the tram, those folks can see me make an omelette, should I decide to make one. If and when I'd (indeed) want to write a story about me breaking some eggs in the kitchen, according to your logic, I should call that story "The Tram"...
Okay, so "The Street" is still better than "Woman-Gets-Stuck-On-Bed-While-Engaged-In-a-Spot-Of-Self-Bondage-And-Is-Caught-By-Husband", I agree...
JJ
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Major Littmann
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Nov 16, 2010 |
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Terrible title, awful ending, but the first three quarters are excellent, then something happened, perhaps you needed to get to the shops or bar but the end is rushed, poorly described and simply unbelieveable, unless the husband has severe mental problems, so 0/10 for the last 20% from 10/10 for the first 80% = 8/10 (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Everybody_Else
(Edit) (Nov 27, 2010)
- Sorry it took so long for me to figure out how to reply to you review.
I'm sorry you feel the ending being rushed. I'm at a loss to think of how it should have been prolonged.
And no. My ex-husband didn't have severe mental problems. He was very self centered, no respect for women and slightly abusive, but not mentally defunct. He was the result of his upbringing along with his strange set of morality, which unfortunately included zero-tolerance for "perverted behaviour". A bit like many religious people in America (to name one place.) Zero-tolerance side by side with prompt action has some weird effects on people.
Anyway. Thank you for your constructive critiscism and I'm sure that I'll try harder to balance my future work.
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