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One Tricked Puppy
Author: Euryleia Rider
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(Added on Oct 17, 2007)
(This month 26135 readers) (Total 69008 readers) |
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A college senior gets revenge on the sophomore who wronged her. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
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Jan 12, 2012 |
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Great story, but there should be more. I would love to see where this goes & I can see so many options. Maybe you will revisit this story & add to it? (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Dec 26, 2011)
- Thanks for the review and encouragement. I'm afraid the characters resisted when I tried to get them to do more!
- Replied by:
Martiniman
(Edit) (Jan 12, 2012)
- Bad, bad puppy!!! Lol
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| Reviewer:
Juventino
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May 28, 2010 |
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It was good story but it moved to quick, wasn't nearly enough character development.
That said it was a exciting story and it built up through out the story and it was deliciously evil, which is sometimes whats needed in a D/s story, however the end was a let down, the story was going nicely then just stopped on what could have been a great finish.
i do however like the originality of it, few stories start with sub enjoying it at the beginning then hating it at the end, a good twist.
i really hope you do another chapter, which could easily push this review to a 10. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2010)
- Thanks, Juventino for the constructive review. I hope to one day continue this story and your words are very helpful.
Thanks for reading my work.
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| Reviewer:
lil_one
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Oct 25, 2008 |
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please please please finish this with the talent show!! it's so good! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Jan 10, 2008 |
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I have to come down on the side of the reviewers who are asking for a continuation. This just feels incomplete to me, but I know how difficult it can be to work on a story you have no more ideas for. (Although, since you say you're stuck on what to do after the show, could you just add an installment covering the show? There's no rule that says stories have to go on forever.) And there's nothing wrong with the level of sex in here. I do agree that the ending seemed a bit rushed, which is why no '10'. Very good work. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Jan 10, 2008)
- Thanks, Curtis. I will try and get back to this one, as I've gotten several emails about it too. I appreciate your review and will keep your points in mind.
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nwaltonn
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Nov 20, 2007 |
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Absolutely awesome story! I would love to be yours! (10/10)
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Euryleia
(Edit) (Nov 21, 2007)
- Thank you very much. I'll keep that in mind.
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kneel9er
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Nov 15, 2007 |
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Amanda turning Riley into a dog. Wonderful concept. I found myself immersed with the two, carried along.
Exciting, erotic, emotional. A great ride, a great read. A question you needn't answer: did the story write itself? (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Nov 16, 2007)
- Thanks so much for letting me know you were able to get into the story.
~grin~ well, my muse had a little help from a reader who made a personal request to be placed in such a position. It would have been rude to refuse. ~evil laugh~
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chksng19
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Nov 1, 2007 |
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A good development from concept to 'done deal'. Great humiliation scenes, but would certainly have liked it longer. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Nov 1, 2007)
- I appreciate the feedback. I'm hoping to get back to this story soon.
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| Reviewer:
Deathnote
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Oct 30, 2007 |
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Loved the story, but I can't help but get a "that's it?" kind of feeling when it ended. The ending just seems a little... rushed. The time it took for Riley to completely change in mentality should had been longer and possibly spread past the 'final event' that never happened. Ah well... still a good read. XD
Thanks for sharing this! ^_^ (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 30, 2007)
- Thanks for the review. I will be trying to finish the story. However, I've got a case of writer's block on what happens after Riley's performance.
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| Reviewer:
Razor7826
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Oct 28, 2007 |
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Fantastic story. Well done.
EDIT: I gave it a 9 instead of a 10 for two reasons. First, Riley's changing mentality is a bit implausible. Second (and the less significant problem), parts of the story could use more description. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 27, 2007)
- Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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| Reviewer:
Haelix
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Oct 28, 2007 |
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This was a REALLY slick story! I absolutely loved the slow, logical buildup of Amanda getting Riley to the point at the very end as a completely helpless pet. There've been a comment or two about no real sex or not giving us the "ending" with the players, but I feel that would kindof soil this story. The manipulation and humiliation more than make up for "so she was tied up and got fucked by lots of dudes". Classic short story leaving you wanting more, but giving you everything you need to close it out in your own mind.! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 28, 2007)
- Thank you so much for the feedback and for taking the time to write the review.
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Oct 20, 2007 |
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Nice humiliation, what more can I say? (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 20, 2007)
- Thank you for saying so.
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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Oct 20, 2007 |
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Always happy to see new work by you, Euryleia! Thank you for sharing!
I love all the buildup you use, you go to exceptional lengths to suspend disbelief and immerse the reader, which is wonderful. However, as mentioned below, I think you got a bit lost in the description rather than the feelings, and the final scene felt a bit aprubt -- particularly, you never made it to the performance that was talked about and built up throughout the entire piece.
All in all, though, it was a really exceptional story and I loved it tremendously -- thanks for sharing!!! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 20, 2007)
- Thanks for the feedback, your reviews are very helpful. I will work on the ending.
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Oct 19, 2007 |
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stories do not get much better then this, and i loved the humiliation aspect (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 19, 2007)
- Thank you so much--I appreciate you saying so.
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| Reviewer:
Mr. Pete
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Oct 19, 2007 |
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I enjoyed the story, but not as much as your other readers. My problem was that the story was heavy on the humiliation, but not on the sex. I liked the buildup, but you avoided the difficult task of following through with the description of the actual capitulation (and you also could have described Riley's increasing desperation building up to the final event... it was almost like you lost steam at the end of the writing process). This story has so much potential, but it falls short compared to other FF stories like Couture's "Puppet Girl." (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 19, 2007)
- Glad you liked the buildup and that the story left you wanting more.
Thanks for the review.
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| Reviewer:
redheadedkristin
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Oct 19, 2007 |
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I loved it and came twice. I love how manipulative and devious Amanda was in bringing Riley along.
I would suggest in the future developing more of the emotions with the people in the story.
(9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 19, 2007)
- I'm glad you were so aroused by the tale. Maybe it should be orgasms instead of stars.
Thanks for the review!
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| Reviewer:
Rubberwolf
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Oct 18, 2007 |
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I am begining to look out for your stories. really good stuff, keep up the good work. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 18, 2007)
- Thank you, Rubberwolf. I'm glad that you're enjoying my stories.
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| Reviewer:
Parker
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Oct 18, 2007 |
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Nice job. Personally, I would have liked it better if Riley had been just a little less willing, but that's just a matter of personal preference. Very well written and enjoyable. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 18, 2007)
- Wow, you're one of my favorite authors and I'm awed that you read and reviewed my story. Thanks so much.
- Replied by:
Parker
(Edit) (Nov 1, 2007)
- Euryleia, thanks for the nice comment.
I just want to say, though, I don't think the story needs a sequel or anything else UNLESS there's more to the story that you want to tell. Personally, I liked endings which leave something to the imagination.
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 17, 2007 |
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Funny enough, I found this new entry when clicking on Euryleia Rider's name in my bookmarks, because the main story page is still sitting on October the 7th...
Anyway, I must say that this again is top notch writing, both on the storytelling front as well as on the eroticometer...
What I lack a lot with most writers is their inability to come up with good dialogue between their characters. Usually there's practically no conversations at all, and when there are, they are ludicrous.
Euryleia Rider's anta/protagonists have 'real' discussions and interaction, they act and speak like normal people would, even in 'weird' situations...
So, what we have is a solid narrative, excellent characterization, strong dialogues and exquisite erotic content... Good enough for a fat tenner in my book...
Thanks again for an exciting and well written story, Euryleia Rider. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Euryleia
(Edit) (Oct 17, 2007)
- Thanks so much, JJ. I didn't even know it was up and I got a lovely notice that I had a review.
I really appreciate the indepth review and am pleased that I was able to earn a 10 from you.
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