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A New Face
Author: Rasputin\'s Memory
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(Added on Sep 4, 2006)
(This month 41827 readers) (Total 70867 readers) |
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An ageplay story based on a personals ad and the girl who responded to it. A romance, with belts, clips, bondage, and exhibitionism. All consensual between adults. I\'m still looking for the girl in the ad. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mrfaja01
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Feb 3, 2008 |
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Great story very discribtive could be continued though. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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Oct 3, 2006 |
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Very good quality fantasy. I didn't like the intro -- I found it disjointed, as if you didn't really know how to start the story...but the rest picked up very well and there were some good scenes. Good job! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Oct 3, 2006)
- As my work has been primarily in poetry, and as poetry is an art no longer appreciated in the states, I am not surprised that a good American hated to have to wade past metaphor and the cold fog of the heart to get to the good stuff. Since you don't like the intro then you probably don't like the reasons I write stories like this and should stay away from my work. But thanks for the pointed critique which tells me that we must go our separate, disparate ways.
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ElectricBadger
(Edit) (Oct 16, 2006)
- Um...I thought the poetry needed more context and didn't make a good intro, not sure how that evolved into racism (America doesn't like poetry? Gadzooks...when did that happen?) and never reading your stuff again...like I said, it was "very good quality," 8/10...calm down a bit and either accept the critique or ignore it, bro.
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| Reviewer:
rce
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Oct 1, 2006 |
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I have never given any story 10, but this was very close. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2006)
- I respect your holding out your ten for something special. I wonder what might have pushed this story into that realm? Thank you for the very compelling comment.
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Sep 27, 2006 |
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Nicely written and it made me sopping wet! And I appreciate the fact the girl was really overage but looked underage. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Sep 27, 2006)
- Thanks for the good review. Making you wet ("sopping") is just the kind of compliment that keeps me writing. What could I do to make it a ten for you? I am always looking for that adult little girl and I've known a few along the way. People like you writing reviews probably keep this site going more than anything else.
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Little_Girl
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Sep 23, 2006 |
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I loved it. The whole nordic thing just made my day. I dont have curly hair, and its not very blonde but I am full blooded nord. I like to know men out there still like us. Little nordic women, they were made to be punished. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Sep 24, 2006)
- I love the little nordic woman, no doubt genetic memory. I agree they were made to be punished. Send me an email and I'll send you some stories like this I don't wish to publish but they are very hot and based on a real relationship. And curly hair, blonde hair, doesn't matter. It's who you are inside that is important.
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| Reviewer:
KSCouple4SLV
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Sep 23, 2006 |
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Awesome story. Wish I could find a little girl just like in the story too. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Sep 24, 2006)
- Thanks for the good review. What kind of thing would make this story a ten for you? And I hope you find your little girl and I find mine.
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Daddy's girl
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Sep 14, 2006 |
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Thank you for this story. It was enjoyable and is just the kind of thing I like to read. I almost thought that my Daddy had written this, cept he dosn't go for blondes :) Can't wait to read the other parts during my manditory ten minute daily masturbation. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- There is some more of it to come (at least two more pieces, progressively more painful). If you send me an email I will send you a couple of stories that I can't really post in a public forum, but which are very like this story. What would it take to get this story to a ten in your book? I am interested and willing to learn and re-write.
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Sep 12, 2006 |
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Exiting and erotic story. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Sep 13, 2006)
- Thanks for the high score. I've never gotten a ten on this site. I wonder why. In any case this is what I write and how I write it and I am glad you liked it. There's some more in the hopper which I think he'll get put out there this week.
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Sep 5, 2006 |
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Hot, but hard to read, as there are too many sentence fragments. I hope there is more somewhere that you can add to this. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Sep 13, 2006)
- After 40 years of writing and publishing fiction I am not likely to alter my style to suit your reading comfort level, so you should probably just not read anymore of my stuff. But, thanks for the helpful advice.
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Sep 4, 2006 |
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Interesting start, wish it had been longer, but definitely worth watching for updates.
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
rasputin6
(Edit) (Sep 5, 2006)
- Thanks for the kind words. There are seven parts. The second has been uploaded this afternoon. I like to try and build a little dramatic tension into the piece, and increase the bet with each segment.
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