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Couple's Plight
Author: Incomplete
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(Added on Aug 8, 2006)
(This month 12413 readers) (Total 28106 readers) |
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A man and his fiancee was crossing the desert when they were pulled over by a cop- the beginning of their long descent into depravity. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
thehammerspakeagain
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Aug 22, 2006 |
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the dialgues are giddy and ridiculous. Plot too lacks any depth to it. A story of this type probably has been done to death already. And even not without being totally wierd and awkward that a reader feels embarrassed for the author. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lee Boudine
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Aug 9, 2006 |
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I think the scenes could be developed more graphicly and the development of the plot more liesurely. It was a good story but not exceptional (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Aug 9, 2006 |
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An interesting retelling of an old story. Maybe a little more creativity through the first sex scene would help.
What is needed even more is a good editor. Tons of wrong words, poor grammar, and bad structure. They really do detract from the story. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Aug 9, 2006 |
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Would have given a higher mark if there had been less mistakes. They spoilt a good story. (7/10)
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geoff
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Aug 9, 2006 |
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Good storyline. Inadequate sentence structure holds it back. Probably worth an 8 with a good proofreader. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 8, 2006 |
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great start can't waitr for part 2 and 3 and 4 ect (10/10)
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