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The Last Hours of Jane
Author: Depr@ved
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(Added on Jun 22, 2006)
(This month 30083 readers) (Total 49435 readers) |
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A woman is abducted, tortured, slowly impaled, then cooked and eaten |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Doc_Odd
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Jan 24, 2011 |
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I prefer the conceit in the Dolcett-style stories that the victim is getting turned on. But I like victim POV, and the torture is innovative. (7/10)
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Dododecapod
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Jun 24, 2006 |
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I'm not a big Dolcett fan, but it can be an enjoyable style. Your writing here is competent, but it leaves out so much - any real backstory, emotional resonance, plus frankly it feels a bit rushed.
Still, it's well-written and composed, and the pump-impalement is something new - whic is moderately amazing. You have some promise, so keep writing and learning. (6/10)
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Mad Lews
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Jun 23, 2006 |
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Dolcette light without a story to go with it.
It works better as a graphic, if you’re going to write about it add some substance (rhyme/ reason) or a unique twist.
(7/10)
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| Reviewer:
virginpussy
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Jun 23, 2006 |
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Weird story, no real substance. Very descriptive though. (4/10)
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