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The Female Manifesto
Author: Carnivale Ed
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(Added on Oct 28, 2005)
(This month 58037 readers) (Total 119779 readers) |
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A young woman learns her first lessons in a society that has recently embraced male domination. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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gilgamekk
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May 5, 2015 |
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The pacing is excellent, the predicament is detailed -- I would happilhappily read more of this tale if it were longer. (9/10)
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erem1s
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May 7, 2012 |
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This is one of the best stories on the site. I still find myself coming back to it. While I might be sad that there's no more, I have to say it ends on a perfect note and works brilliantly as a stand-alone short story. It belongs in a BDSM anthology. (10/10)
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littleone_
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Jul 19, 2011 |
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the only three chapters from 2005 are awesome but then it just stops. Why waste you time getting into the story. (1/10)
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Dryhill
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Nov 26, 2010 |
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A little far fetched but very well told, we really do get to know how the main girl feels.
Some four years have passed since this story first appeared so how about a follow on? It would be good to know if her new Master was kind or not and also to know how Mandy/muffy is getting on with her Master. i would also like to get the reactions/feeling of the young Masters and how they coped - you mentioned one was shy, how did he cope? (8/10)
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claire
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Oct 28, 2008 |
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I love this story - just back to read it for the nth time. I am disappointed that there never was a chapter 3 or any other offerings by you. Please write more. Good characters, great humiliation, great plot.... (10/10)
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Olokun
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Jul 27, 2006 |
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I can only hope this is continued. (10/10)
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Kitimatbillie
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Jul 2, 2006 |
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I enjoyed this story very much & hope the auther will produce many more chapters (10/10)
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lilrrh
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Apr 11, 2006 |
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This just kept getting better the further in I got, I'd love to read more. (9/10)
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LittleRedhead
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Jan 17, 2006 |
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More please!
You grabbed me right from the start. The fear and humiliation is very palpable and damn hot.
You write well, and I especially enjoy the fact that you are taking your to time set up the circumstance and characters within the story and not just jumping straight into the sex.
I’m checking in regularly for the next chapter. Please don’t keep me waiting too long…
Thanks,
Mandy
(9/10)
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kristycumslut
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Jan 3, 2006 |
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Great story keep on writing it and I will continue reading it I really liked the plot and the all the detail. (10/10)
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balthasaur
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Dec 29, 2005 |
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This was an excellent story. Rated it a 10. I hope you continue to develope this story as I enjoy reading this kind of story. (10/10)
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Samantha_Strife
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Dec 28, 2005 |
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A little too slow to accelerate, but clearly a bondage tale in development for the intellegensia of BDSM fiction. (8/10)
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heycarrieanne
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Dec 28, 2005 |
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This story was excellent! It had a great beginning to explain what was going on, good character development, and it left this reader wanting more! I can't wait to read the next chapters! (10/10)
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rob.wilson
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Dec 28, 2005 |
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One of the better pieces I've read on this site lately.
I'm not so sure the prolog was needed but overall I enjoyed the story. And I'll be curious to follow along and see what happens to Mandy and company. (8/10)
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tabuk
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Nov 22, 2005 |
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I do hope many more chapters are written. Its got off to a good start. I was very sceptical to start with but as each sentence gave more explanation the story stood up. The prologue was a good idea. (8/10)
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eurogirl
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Nov 18, 2005 |
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I'm looking forward to following this story. (7/10)
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mstrger
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Nov 18, 2005 |
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Love to first chapter. Hope site settles down shortly so we can have more (9/10)
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sheilagirl
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Nov 10, 2005 |
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Excellent! I really really hope there will be more chapters. Pleeeeease! And the bondage hasn't even started yet. (10/10)
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learningtopleez
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Nov 4, 2005 |
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Wonderful story thus far Carnivale Ed Sir! Humiliation always grabs me in all the right places! Can't wait for more! (9/10)
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BigCat
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Nov 2, 2005 |
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Really a well written tale. Excellent inner life, tension. Hope it is continued. (10/10)
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LordVetinari
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Nov 1, 2005 |
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An interesting premise, but will the author continue the story, or will it wither on the vine? Well-written. It came as quite a surprise to realise the author was not a Yank (the reference to the sixth form did it for me). (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Carnivale Ed
(Edit) (Nov 7, 2005)
- I can't promise it won't wither on the vine for some periods, but I'm hoping I'll be able to coax a few grapes out fairly regularly. Chapter two's posted to the site, and will be up when things settle down around here, I suppose. Hope you like it, and thanks for the kind review.
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J's blu
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Nov 1, 2005 |
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well, i feel i must support all ozzie authors! and especially ones as articulate as You Sir! i feel this story developing nicely and can see You have a plan in mind. oh, and Happy Birthday for yesterday!! (8/10)
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Anniegal
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Oct 30, 2005 |
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A well written story so far. I will be interested to see what you do with the characters from now on. Keep up the good work. (8/10)
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Guiller
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Oct 30, 2005 |
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Ditto, want more :) (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Carnivale Ed
(Edit) (Oct 30, 2005)
- There's definitely a second chapter, it's almost done. Should post it within the next week. Thanks again, all, for taking the time.
CE.
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mkemse
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Oct 30, 2005 |
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good start, i will be curious to see where you go from here, if anywhere (8/10)
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chksng19
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Oct 30, 2005 |
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A good humiliation treatment so far. I am very curious to see where you take the story. (8/10)
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redEva
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Oct 29, 2005 |
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Great beginning, I am excitedly looking forward to development of the story. (9/10)
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nikita
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Oct 29, 2005 |
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The Female Manifesto...was it written by the same author who wrote the DOM guide? You grabbed me by the short hairs once the naked jogger running along side (it's owner?) being controlled by a leash. It was all downhill from there. Looking forward to the next installment. (10/10)
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woolfighter
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Oct 29, 2005 |
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I love it so far; go on. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Carnivale Ed
(Edit) (Oct 29, 2005)
- Thanks to all who have taken the time to review my story. It's much appreciated.
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Oct 28, 2005 |
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I fully agree with the previous reviewer. None of the glaring errors so common with other stories, and interesting prelude to a story that will, hopefully, live up to its promises. I'd like to see another chapter or two, and would certainly considering revising my score at that time. (8/10)
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Birchmaster
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Oct 28, 2005 |
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I thought an otherwise far fetched scenario was put neatly into credible context by the plague and the attitudes of the survivors. It was well written and left me hoping for more chapters soon (8/10)
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