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Jack - The Party (illustrated story)
Author: Bo Varg
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(Added on Sep 26, 2005)
(This month 30268 readers) (Total 86978 readers) |
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Jack's biggest client, Alf Cleghorn invites the BDSM-society to a garden party where he is going to introduce his new found sex slave and her daughter to the society, but something goes terribly wrong at the party |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
nikita
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Apr 20, 2006 |
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The illustrations were good and I followed the story better by looking at the piccies. The most important thing you must do is to get a new editor. (6/10)
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chksng19
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Apr 1, 2006 |
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Is English your second language? The story seems to say so. Many, many spelling and "wrong word" errors; you need an editor, badly. (3/10)
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heycarrieanne
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Sep 26, 2005 |
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So-so writing, needs a lot of improvement in plot development, and grammar. Also, that switching fonts was kind of annoying, too. (5/10)
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La Toya
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Sep 26, 2005 |
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A Fair start, would have liked a little longer first chapter. (6/10)
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bdsmbill
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Sep 26, 2005 |
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This was an interesting start, but it would be better if you made your installments somewhat longer. 9K is a bit short. (6/10)
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